The blood seems alive
once the vein has been found
my mind has gone blank
and I block out all sound
it tasts pretty good
but i don't know why
my victim is beautiful
but she's starting to cry.
I loved her so dearly
but after I "died"
she looked more delicious
to my hungry eyes
her beautiful neck
was alluring and sweet
but not so much now that
her heart's ceased to beat.
what's happening to me?
I thought I died!
but as my love perished
I did nothing but cry













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Although it is very erie at the same time.
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"I have seen everything yet, i have seen nothing"
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I'm*Dean*NOT*Dean*obsessing!!*Dean*
it tasts pretty good
but i don't know why
my victim is beautiful
but she's starting to cry.
How about "but I do not know why" it gives it more of a beat in that line.
what's happening to me?
I thought I died!
but as my love perished
I did nothing but cry
"What's happened to me?
I thought I had died
But as my love perished
I did nothing but cry."
How's that?
Sorry if it's too invasive of your poem
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I'm*Dean*NOT*Dean*obsessing!!*Dean*
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